Wednesday, August 20, 2014

Path



on a path laden with stars
and a bag of honeyed kisses
you set forth on a journey
of hits and misty misses

a few tricks up your sleeve
to face the tasks at hand
this path throws you surprises
you now have to take a stand

that's how you grow, that's how you run
in flowery bush and thorny hedge
time to don the student's cap
this path is one learning stage


This poem is shared with Poetry Jam - Path.



Tuesday, August 19, 2014

There Are Stories



there are stories
that just sail by
pinning us with hope
and that single crescent lie


This Poem is shared with Magpie Tales- Mag 233.



Monday, August 18, 2014

Tapestry

swirling waves, blue clouds
sweet fragrance immersed sand
nature's tapestry


This Haiku is shared with Carpe Diem - Tapestry.

Sunday, August 17, 2014

Confused

confused I was
narrating the tale
worried about the result
pass or fail

confused she was
smiles embracing tears
finding out ways
to drive away those fears

confused we were
two lost hearts
scared of adversities
we decided to part


This Poem is shared with Theme Thursday - Confused.



Rhythm of Solitude

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sit back and listen
to the rhythm of solitude
eyes closed, soul open


This Haiku is shared with Carpe Diem - Inner Self (Solitude).



Gifted - Review



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Title: Gifted : Inspiring Stories of People with Disabilities
Author: Sudha Menon and V. R. Ferose
Publisher: Random House India
Publication Year: 2014
Language: English
Binding: Paperback
Genre: Non-Fiction, Motivational and Inspirational
No. of Pages: 304
Price: Rs 299
My Rating: 4/5


Saturday, August 16, 2014

Dig Up My Grave



dig up my grave
and you will find a story
hidden in words
and twigs pale gray
that squirm beneath your soles
as you march over departed souls
leaving in its wake
the trails of fading glory


This Poem is shared with Picture It And Write.



Friday, August 15, 2014

Wings Of Promises


wings of promises
soaring high in pristine hope
and then comes the fall


This Haiku is shared with Carpe Diem - Wings.



I Am Dead But My Heart Beats - Review

How a love story once hated saved 6 lives in a Communal Riot?
Should community, language or tradition be the obstructions for true love from blossoming?
How cruel can a married girl's destiny be to throw her into prostitution?
Have you ever attended an uninvited marriage reception with your beloved and got caught by the hosts?
Why a boy decides to spend his entire life in a mental asylum?
Why a girl at midnight runs away from her family?
How worse it can be if you are caught by your girlfriend's parents while kissing her?
I am dead but my heart beats is a fascinating saga of love, education, community, hatred, sacrifices and hope. It's about four youngsters from different communities ,speaking different languages - Aryan, Anshika, Zahid and Swati. Get ready for a heart-breaking journey of a complete real life story.

About the Author
Priyank, born in Amethi (Uttar Pradesh) on 29th October, 1992 and brought up in Ghatsila (a small town near Steel city JAMSHEDPUR in Jharkhand), Priyank is a Gold Medalist in Creative writing. He is currently pursuing his Engineering (3rd year, Electrical Engg.) from BIT Sindri, Dhanbad (Jharkhand government's lone technical institute since 1949). He is a top 100 rank holder in Science and Mathematics Olympiad. Keenly inclined to his studies since school, Priyank's dream is to bring changes in the country and make it a better place to live in. Writing was never his passion, nor his goal. It happened to him by chance, by destiny, in an attempt to fulfill someones dream. He loves cricket, travelling, sleeping and reading novels. He is highly passionate about entrepreneurship, autonomous robotics and Indian politics. Join Priyank on Facebook at www.facebook.com/Priyank.bits and know more about him. You can also reach him directly at reachpriyank29@gmail.com or through his official novels page on Facebook www.facebook.com/iamdeadbutmyheartbeats You can visit his blogs at http://authorpriyank.wordpress.com.




One good thing about ‘I Am Dead But My Heart Beats’ is that the pace never stops. The story moves ahead briskly, and you don’t get the feeling of being left stranded in static prose. Unfortunately, this also turns out to be one of the primary drawbacks of this book.

‘It’s not a love story … it’s a revolution’ is the tag-line of Priyank’s debut novel, the author giving a clear indication that this is not just another teenage romance, but deals with more serious issues. Fair enough. It’s always a pleasure reading something that contains deep materials, and not just revolves amidst college campuses. With hopes and anticipations floating high, I turned to page one.

Now, I do not have the complete idea regarding how a book gets published. Well, I do know in bits and pieces, for example, the writer pens down his story, approaches a publishing house, and the editor looks upon his or her work and rectifies the mistakes. Once the errors have been eradicated, the book goes on print. This is the basic concept of the publication industry, with a few steps added here and there. What happens when one of these steps go missing?

Editing is one of the key components of every story. Whether you are writing a short story or a novel, you have to make sure it’s properly edited before the final version is released. ‘I Am Dead But My Heart Beats’ fails miserably in this front. Too many grammatical errors, wrong use of tenses, and misplaced words mar the narrative. Also, while the basic tone is simple, a few ‘heavy’ words have been used here and there, and I don’t know why. What matters in a story is not what you say, but how you say it. Usage of those words often leads to a disconnect between them and the rest of the sentences.

‘I Am Dead But My Heart Beats’ tries to deal with several topics at once, which on one hand adds a briskness into the narrative, but on the other hand, also leads to a lot of unnecessary clutter which one could have easily done away with. Aryan and Anshika are the protagonists, but then, we also have the love story of Zahid and Swati running on a similar thread. The book addresses various topics like love, lust, education, parental pressure, religion and violence, and in doing so, often drifts away from the track. The author tries to communicate several messages all at the same time, and in the humdrum, the words get lost in a chaotic maze.

It takes a lot of time and patience to write a novel. Hundreds of pages, thousands of words and a plethora of thoughts give shape to the idea. However, shouldn't an equal amount of time be dedicated to ensure that the final product doesn't have significant flaws? A better editing, and a well organized sequence of events would have worked wonders for this book.

Priyank can certainly do better, and hopefully his future projects wouldn't be complaining of flawed editing.


Title: I Am Dead But My Heart Beats
Author: Priyank
Publisher: Teenage Publishers
Publication Year: 2014
Language: English
Binding: Paperback
Genre: Fiction, Romance
No. of Pages: 224
Price: Rs 140
My Rating: 2/5



Wednesday, August 13, 2014

Gift Me A Wing



gift me a wing
so that I can fly
high, high and high
above all the clutter
beyond every mess
the world wouldn't mind
one inhabitant less

too much have I seen
too many places have I been
yet, the story is always the same
wars and hatred, humanity ashamed
tears lay burnt in ashes of hope
violence is insane, a drug, a dope

gift me a wing
so that I can fly
away to a world
where souls wouldn't cry
build a new tomorrow
erase the gory past
peace would prevail
and love shall forever last


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